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When one comment turns dusk into day
My heart stops beating
There was nothing I could do
My entire body weighted down with those words
Screams of protest scratched at my throat
Clawing to clamber out
But my mouth, stone
As I drown in confusion
I cannot fight it
I don't even attempt
As your words push me down ever further
Into the murky depths
One thought omnipotent
How could you…
with those words
you hurt me more than you could ever know...

~Critique as you like~
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:iconphotophantom15:
another job well done!! <3 u r turning out to b one of m favorite poets on DA! <333
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:iconmylifeisriggs:
Aww thank you!!
You just made my day :D
<3333
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:iconphotophantom15:
im glad!!!! <333333
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:iconrandomite93:
Aweosme poem, the whole feeling behind it is cool XD
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:iconflyhigh20:
good question....how could you.....nice poem ;)
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:iconmylifeisriggs:
-Sigh- I just...I don't know...the knife was just there and he made me so angry...oh wait, different topics? o.O


XPPPP thanks :)
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:iconflyhigh20:
what knife? I hate when people make me angry..it's so hard

you're welcome
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:iconmylifeisriggs:
Haha I was kidding. Like you asked me "how could you?"
so I meant there was a knife there and he angered me soo....yeah haha nvm xP

Definitely is hard when people make you angry >.<
(this poem was more about the shock of what he said and the sadness that ensued)
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